Nama : Ni Luh
Denmacika Widiary
Nim :
1112021098
Kelas : 4E
MY TWIN
Now,
I am nineteen years old, exact I will soon be twenty old. Age that could be
considered mature, but it is true maturity cannot be measured simply by looking
at age alone because I know, sometimes I like a child. I can still tell myself
I am not mature because until now, I am hard to make a choice. Whatever is it.
Because I think choosing is the most difficult and confusing action. Maybe this
is characteristic that I want to change.
I
have best friend, her name Ida Ayu Madriani Dewi. Two years ago, exactly the
first time we studied in the same class, I do not know her because I was shy
and had low self confident to talk to new people. Yet somehow the beginning, I
knew her and talk to her. First time, she looks like a calm person. Why is
that? Because she did not say not so many joke. I think maybe she was also an
arrogant girl. Other reason, I also consider her moody, not because she was
arrogant, but because sometimes I see her calm an sometimes ambitious.
As
time went on, I with her in E class together. We always do assignment and travel
together. Therefore, I know her family well and vice verse. I know that she respects to her parents. She is also diligent in her house because everyday she
can do household alone, such as sweeping, watering, and feeding her father’s
pets. Although sometimes she likes to put it off. It is clearly seen that she
is a girl who loves her family.
After
I know about her life, I am familiar with her character that I think is not
good, she has no discipline of time. If I make an appointment with her, I must
remind her. As I know, she is very sluggish. She thinks all things are relaxing
without having to rush. I find out she is not calm girl as I have ever thought
of before. She is talk active person, if she talks about her story, maybe my
time will run out just to listen to her story. Also, she was a moody. Sometimes
she is diligent, but sometimes she likes to delay the work. But behind it all,
she is a loyal person. Loyal to her family, friends and boyfriend. I know that
because I feel it. She will never leave her friends when her friends not good
condition. She was able to maintain her relationship with her boyfriend for
five years. It is not a short time. It needs patience and loyalty.
When
I firstly knew her, I was shocked. Because many characteristics that I have
same as hers. Not just one character, nut almost the entire of my
characteristics are owned by her such as, delay to work, always feel relax, and
moody.
This
is very interesting friendship because I feel I have twin. Our characteristic
have not too much different. I hope, we still can be friendship.
Actually your writing is good enough but I found some mistake such as at the sentence " exact I will soon be twenty old" . I think it will be better if you use exactly than exact. and other mistake at sentence "exact I will soon be twenty old" I think less of years and the correct sentence is " exactly I will soon be twenty years old".
BalasHapusThank you very much !
your writing is interesting, you write what you feel, it makes your writing fell nature.
BalasHapusbut, in the first paragraph, why you explain your self? where is your introduction? where is your thesis statement?